Five Instant Structure Fixes

Five Instant Structure Fixes

THE BAD NEWS: If you’re making these 5 mistakes, you’re not ready for prime time.

THE GOOD NEWS: Correcting these 5 mistakes will rocket your script quality up so fast NASA will dial you for launch tips.

  1. KILL THE FIRST THIRTY PAGES: Stories are supposed to be a strip tease. Drop one veil at a time. If you explain EVERYTHING up front about every character — in other words, plop a naked fat woman waving her psych file on the couch? That’s not sexy. That’s not mysterious. That’s not interesting. Knock off the first thirty pages of the script and see if the story still plays. Odds are it will. If it doesn’t? What must you put back in to make it play? Odds are, not all thirty pages.
Author, Screenwriter & Director Eric Red

Guest Post: Writer-Director Eric Red on The First Ten Pages

This is a guest post from screenwriter, director and author Eric Red.  Eric’s film credits include The Hitcher, Near Dark, Blue Steel, Cohen And Tate, Body Parts, Bad Moon and 100 Feet:


~ by Eric Red

As a screenwriter, you have ten pages to hook the reader or you’re dead. The First Ten Pages are the most important pages of a screenplay. Why?  Because if you haven’t hooked the reader–be it producer, director, star, development executive, script reader or anyone else down the film business food chain—-you’ve lost them. They will probably put the script down and not read any further, and not buy or make the script. You want to start your story, particularly a horror or thriller movie, with a bang.

Actor Bait, or, Think Like an Actor

Actor Bait – Or What Your Script Really Really Needs to Be

There’s a great anecdote in the book Your Screenplay Sucks: 100 Ways to Make It Great.”

It’s the year 2000 and William Akers, the author, is standing in line at a movie theater to see Finding Forrester. Two guys are in front of him and one says, “What’s it about?” And the other says, “Sean Connery.”

Let that sink in.

Five Instant Script Fixes

Five Instant Script Fixes

THE BAD NEWS:  If you’re making these 5 mistakes, you’re not ready for prime time.

THE GOOD NEWS:  Correcting these 5 mistakes will rocket your script quality up so fast NASA will dial you for launch tips.

1:  NAKED SCENE HEADERS: Naked scene headers are headers floating on the page with no scene description:


Who won the game?

No scene header should float alone on the page. At the very least — and I do mean very least — a reader must know WHO is in the scene:


Bob looks up at Dan.

Who won the game?

Active Voice vs. Passive Voice with Calvin & Hobbes

Active Voice vs. Passive Voice

I get into trouble sometimes with students.  I will tell a student something doesn’t work.  The student will say, “Gotcha.” I will think all is well.  Till the next time I see the student’s writing and the student will still be doing what I said doesn’t work.  And I’ll say, Listen, you really can’t do this.  And the student will say, “Gotcha.”  Add water.  Rinse.  Repeat.

This happens with passive voice a lot.

Screenwriter & Producer Richard Dane Scott

Guest Post: Screenwriter Richard Dane Scott: 15 Warning Signs You Might Be THAT Guy

This is a guest post from Richard Dane Scott.  Richard wrote a piece for the AFF blog AFF IS MY BFF.  It’s hilarious.  Read it.  [If it is not hilarious to you, you have not been doing this long enough.]

I immediately emailed Richard and said —

Three Reasons Someone Might Not Read Your Script

Three Reasons Someone Might Not Read Your Script

NUMBER 1: You Have No Idea In Hell Whom You Are Talking To – And You Don’t Try To Find Out Before Shooting Off Your Mouth

Conversations With Students; AKA, The Grand Illusionist

Convo’s With Students: The Grand Illusionist


[names have been changed to protect the innocent, that would be my students — the non-innocent would be me.]

MAX: Each story is like getting thrown into a room with a blindfold on and trying to find a door out.


MAX: You might make it through one on innate intuition and luck.

MAX: But the next one? And the next one?


MAX: Craft is sort of like the blind man’s walking stick in those blindfolded rooms.

STUDENT B: Nobody has any idea what this is like.

MAX: Writers all do.

MAX: Civilians don’t.

Dinosaur Cloning!

High Concept Writing: The Crichton Model

If there is one writer who regularly nailed high concept [and did it over and over again] it was Michael Crichton. He was one of the first writers to write a story about a scientific and military response to a plague hitting the U.S. [Andromeda Strain]. Not to mention the only guy talking about space probes bringing back plagues. One of the first writers to address how organ harvesting could go really REALLY wrong [Coma*]. Was the writer who took the concept of cloning and said, Forget cloning sheep and humans, let’s clone dinosaurs [Jurassic Park]. He took on the Japanese/American business clash [Rising Sun]. Looked at sexual harassment from the perspective of a man being sexually harassed in the workplace instead of from the [much more common] perspective of a woman [Disclosure]. If there is one thing Crichton was continually capable of doing, it was looking at current trends and issues before anyone else did and not only nailing them before anyone else did, but taking them to their extremes.

“Extreme” and “first” define “high concept.” And while you don’t always have to be first, to be high concept you do have to go extreme.

Contortions of the Modern Day Screenwriter

The Logline; Or, Contortions of the Modern Day Screenwriter

So I am talking to my students about pitching.  And I’m talking about pulling information for a short one liner describing story.  And someone gets stuck.

In every pitch, the short pitch, the medium pitch, the long pitch, the phone pitch, the lunch pitch, the elevator pitch, the wow nice to see you in line at the store pitch – in every pitch – you have to be able to —